Untitled - #20479

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SAMPLE ANSWER

This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 7.0 score.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to you to provide a feedback on the “Kitchen Wonders” cookery course I have taken recently.As my cooking had become more and more complimented since,I would like to take this opportunity to express my appreciation for the evolution I have attained from the course.

Albeit a short and basic course,it contained useful tips on using cutlery and cookware which were entirely new to me. Having always cooked by instinct  these tips (enabled) brought to light simple mistaken I had been making, which now I avoid.Moreover,I particularly enjoyed the “Kitchen Hacks” module, and its techniques have brought my cooking skills to a new level.

I have been using these lessons on weekends,when I normally cook for my family,and the difference in clear.The effect the course had on my dishes has been remarked on some occasions,and this new found ability has been raising expectations as the word spreads throughout my relatives.Still,I am confident they shall not be disappointed.

I intend on honing this skill further,especially since the course did not address dessert-making.Should such a course be offered,I would be delighted to enroll and keep collecting awestruck expressions from my relatives.I really appreciate the results your course has provided me,and I look forward to even more.

Sincerely,

Paulo

Here is the examiner’s comment:

 The response covers all the bullet points and develops them at some length. The purpose is clear and the only inconsistency in tone is the use of [Sincerely] to close the letter. Information and ideas are logically organised and there is a clear progression throughout. There is a range of cohesive devices, used appropriately[Albeit I it I which丨these tips丨Moreover], for example. The range of vocabulary is wide enough to show some less common items and collocations [cooked by instinct I brought to light I Kitchen Hacks 丨 new found ability 丨 honing my skills I awestruck], with only minor errors [The effect the course had on my dishes has been remarked (upon) on some occasions I enroll I enrol ]. There is a variety of complex structures, with frequent error-free sentences and good control of punctuation with only a few errors.

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SAMPLE ANSWER

This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 6.5 score.

In the world, there are things we can buy paying money But,at the same time there are things that we’ll never be able to get thought we are milianair.

We can make ourselves spending money to buy visible items,such as expensive cars,bags,houses,clothes and so on.A friend of mine,when she is stressful she like to go shopping to get rid of the stress.Luckily she is rich so she is satisfied and happy after purchasing as many things as possible.Also,money can be important for some things which are not visible.For example,if any of family members is illed requring a expensive surgery or just suffer without having the surgery.

We can not only make ourselves happy when we have lots of money,we can also be happy with some things that we never buy with money.

My parents were not rich when I was a child.I desired to get toys and pretty clethings but they couldn’t afford to buy them. I was disappointed that I could not have those things while my friends were having.

But my parents brought me up with unlimited love and they became my best friend to listen to me when I was in truble and needed adviie. As a result my childhood was happy and I grew up having positive way of thinking instead of complainng for the things my parents couldn’t buy for me.

In conclusion through my experience,we can make our lives convenient when having enough money.But,we do not need to be frustrated or desperate with not having lots of money.

Happiness depends on our mind set and it is always subjective to change if the amount of money is considered a lot or little.

By focusing on what we have on our hands now and drive to achieve what we want to gain,we can always be happy.

Here is the examiner’s comment:

The candidate has addressed all parts of the task and presents a well-developed response. Ideas are relevant, extended and supported throughout. The candidate’s task response is the best aspect of this piece of writing. Ideas are logically organised, with some use of cohesive devices, and there is a clear overall progression, but paragraphing is inconsistent and not always logical. The range of vocabulary is adventurous [proceed with the surgery I unlimited love I positive way of thinking Ifrustrated I desperate], but there also errors in some quite basic items [thought I though丨milianair/ millionaire丨stressfulI /stressed丨illed/  ill丨clethings/  clothes丨the/ they丨truble/trouble I adviie/ advice I complainng/ complaining], which limits the rating on Lexical Resource.There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, with a fair degree of accuracy, but a wider range and better control over punctuation would perhaps result in a higher score here.

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TEST 2, WRITING TASK 1

MODEL ANSWER

This model has been prepared by an examiner as an example of a very good answer.

However, please note that this is just one example out of many possible approaches.

Dear Sir or Madam

The latest edition of your travel magazine included an article about Cambridge, but this

contained incorrect information. The writer described the University of Cambridge as being

tine oldest in the world whereas in fact the oldest university in the English-speaking world is

Oxford. The University of Cambridge was founded in 1209 but Oxford was known to have existed in 1096.

A magazine such as fours has an international reputation and is extremely influential with

travel companies and individuals alike. It is essential that any information published should be

accurate and reliable and I was genuinely surprised that the facts had not been checked prior

to publication.

l feel that the least the magazine can do is to publish a correction and an apology in next

month’s magazine. I would also urge you to ensure that all factual information is thoroughly

checked before publication.

Yours faithfully

Alan Watson

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TEST 2, WRITING TASK 2

SAMPLE ANSWER

This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 8.0 score.

Some of the people believe that friends with exactly the same opinions on different topics are better than the ones that can argue with them.

On the one hand, having similar interests on hobbies is a reason to start a friendship. In this case

people always have something to discuss. If our friend has the same view of particular problem

as you do, he can help you to find a solution faster.Such friend will always support you and take your side in any argument. He will be there for you in any situation.

On the other hand, having equal opinions with you friend is sometimes boring. You always agree on every issue with each other and have no discussion or argument. If ‘four friend disagrees with you,you can discuss both views,reach a compromise and come up with a suitable solution. But strong disagreement can often lead to a heated argument or even ruin ‘four friendship.

In my opinion, friends should not agree on everything they are talking about. I think that this bind

of friendship is boring and it is not likely to last for long. However, a friend with the same opinion

as yours will definitely support your point of view in any discussion. And it is a wonderful thing, too.

In conclusion l would like to say that it is good to have different views on some topics or problems

but you should be loyal to the opinion of your friend. Everyone should appreciate their friendship

and shouldn’t let stupid arguments ruin it.

Here is the examiner’s comment:

The candidate has discussed both sides of the topic and provided his/her own

opinion in the final two paragraphs. Ideas for each point of view are developed

and supported, but there is room for further extension. The writing shows logical

organisation and sequencing of ideas, with good use of cohesive devices [the ones

that | In this case | On the one hand … On the other hand \ this kind of friendship |

the same opinion as yours]. Paragraphing is used sufficiently and appropriately.

The range of vocabulary includes some less common items and collocations

[support you \ take your side in \ be there for you | reach a compromise \ come up

with] and there are only rare errors [you / your friend]. There is a wide range of

complex structures with very few errors (there are two cases of missing articles),

but both vocabulary and grammatical range lack the sophistication expected from a

Band 9 answer.